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Callahan Gobble's avatar

You astound me!

Matt Garland's avatar

You really dazzled my dingo today. I love the alliteration, especially in the second one. The third one was really interesting, precisely because I had the expectation of alliteration in the back half of the lines, and it went missing, which make the return of the alliteration all the more powerful on the next line.

Anthony Etherin's avatar

Thank you! Yes, I found the sudden withdrawal of alliteration in the last beats a useful tool. It also helps highlight the “otherness” of the monometer sonnet.